Second Draft Target Audience Feedback

Once completing and uploading the second draft of my music video I decided that I ought to gain some perspective from my target audience before continuing with my editing. I asked a group of peers, both media and non-media, students to feedback on what they liked and what they would improve and this is the response I received:

In my next draft I will try to incorporate my audiences ideas as much as I possibly can with the footage I already have.